悬赏300!英语文章修改!英语高手来修改语法!
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发布时间：2022-04-24 09:36
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热心网友
时间：2022-06-18 13:31
我觉得你的想法很好，有些句子也写得不错。下面是我的修改和说明，希望对你有帮助
If I have super powers, I will use these capabilities to do the good things.
(If I had exceptional power, I would use it for the good of the people.)
评：super powers是超级大国的意思
做好事不会写成do the good things，一般是do the good deeds
语法上，这篇文章的语气应该用虚拟语气，因为你实际上并没有超能力，你只是谈论假如你有的话会怎样。你有些地方的时态没用对，需要改正，下面如果碰到同样的问题就直接改了。
If I could fly and have a strong body, I will rush to the place at the first time,to help those people who will die.If a fire accident happened, I will arrive there and take those people to safe place.When the reporter ask who am I,I won't tell them and leave there quietly.
(If I could fly and had a strong body, I would rush to save dying people. If a fire broke out, I would arrive at the scene in no time, and take people who are trapped to safety. Should the reporter ask who I am, I would leave quietly without telling them my name.)
评：rush已经包含第一时间的意思了，不用另外说一遍
要死的人dying people
（火灾）爆发break out
（火灾）现场scene，用there不够准确
受困的人people who are trapped，仅仅说people也不够准确
When the reporter ask who am I 语序不正确
If I could talk to animals,I will talk with them a lot,then I will understand animals'opinions.After that,I will invoke all the people in the world DO NOT HURT ANIMAIS,THEY ARE OUR FRIENDS.It is really a great thing,isn't it?
(If I could talk to animals, I would talk with them a lot to understand what they think. Then I'd translate their words to human beings, so that we could know our animal friends better, and would not do things to harm them. This would really be a great thing, right?)
评：动物所想what they think
和动物相对的是人类，这时候一般不说people in the world，而说human beings
做伤害他们的事情do things to harm them，harm除了肉体上的伤害，还有其它方面的危害，用在这里比hurt好
If I could make nice and delicious food,I will give them to poor people.Because they really need a good big meal,if they haven't a strong body,how can they work hard?When they say thank you to me,I will smile to them and tell them it is my ty.
(If I could make nice and delicious food, I would give them to poor people in need. In order to work hard, their bodies have to be strong. When they thank me, I would smile to them, and tell them it is my ty.)
评：有需要的穷苦人poor people in need
为了能够辛勤工作In order to work hard
I would smile to them, and tell them it is my ty.你这句写得不错
If I have many more super powers,of course I will use them to do many more good things.Although it is a nice dream,I will do as I said if I really have these super powers.Okay,just let this dream keeping forever.
(If I had other kinds of exceptional power, I would surely use them to do many more good deeds. Although it is only a nice dream, I would definetely do as I promised if it came true. )
评：surely，definetely肯定地
梦想成真dream come true
最后一句你可以考虑删掉
ps.楼上同学的翻译很生动啊
热心网友
时间：2022-06-18 13:32
1super powers改为Superpowers or super strength.super power 是超级大国的意思。
2to do the good things.改为to do good为好，就是做好事的意思，
3those people who will die建议改为those people who are dying.你的意思表达的是将要死的人，任何人都要死的，所以不是很确切。
4I will arrive there and take those people to the safe place.When the reporter ask who I am,I won't tell them but leave there quietly.
5I will give them to poor people because they really need a big good meal.
恕我直言，这篇翻译很直白，看起来不美，吧但本人水平有限，不会改的很好。翻译是件不容易的事啊。
热心网友
时间：2022-06-18 13:32
自己对照一下吧~
If I have super powers, I will use these capabilities to do good things.
If I should fly and have a strong body, I would rush to the disaster scene in no time to help those people who are dying.If a fire accident happens, I will arrive there and take those people to the safe place.When the reporter asks who I am,I won't tell him or her and leave quietly.
If I should talk to animals,I would talk with them a lot,then I would understand animals'opinions.Then I will invoke all the people in the world DO NOT HURT ANIMALS,THEY ARE OUR FRIENDS.It is really a great thing,isn't it?
If I should make nice and delicious food,I would give them to poor people.Because they really need a good big meal.If they haven't a strong body,how can they work hard?When they say 'thank you' to me,I will smile to them and tell them it is my ty.
If I have many more super powers,of course I will use them to do far more good things.Although it is just a nice dream,I will do as I have said if I really have these super powers.Okay,just let this dream carry on forever.
热心网友
时间：2022-06-18 13:33
If I have super powers(power)
I will use these(the) capabilities(capability)to do the good things
If I could fly and have a strong body, I will rush to the place at the first time,to help those people who will die.If a fire accident happened, I will arrive(arrive 改为be)there and take(take 改为bring) those people to safe place.When the reporter ask who am I（改为I am）,I won't tell them(them可去掉) and leave there（there可去掉）quietly.
If I could talk to animals,I will talk with them a lot,then I will understand animals'opinions.After that,I will invoke all the people in the world (加上that not to)DO NOT(去掉 not) HURT ANIMAIS(拼写错误 ANIMALS),THEY ARE OUR FRIENDS.It is really a great thing,isn't it?
If I could make nice and delicious food,I will give them to poor people.Because they really need a good (加上and)big meal,if they haven't(haven't 改为don't have)a strong body,how can they work hard?When they say thank you to me,I will smile to them and tell them it is my ty.
If I have many more super powers(改为power),of course I will use them to do many more good things(改为thing).Although it is a nice dream,I will do as I said if I really have these(改为the) super powers(改为Power).Okay,just let this dream keeping forever.整句改为okay, just keep this dream forever.
评语，词汇可以，但是英语的思路和中文不一样的，平常注意多阅读多练习，祝你不断进步。
热心网友
时间：2022-06-18 13:33
翻译的很棒啦~~！！
看看偶的能不能帮忙~~
要是想更文绉绉一些，更优美生动一些，可以多用一些短语以及比较地道的词汇，再变换一下句型，刘流畅的美文喽~~
偶只能改这些了~~审查一下吧~(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……
累坏了的说。。。。
原
<If I have super powers, I will use these capabilities to do the good things.>
后
If I have unparalleled sense, I will take the full advantage to do the good.
（super power 也可以，要用的话不加s好一些，或者你说If I got a super power 也可，不过多是中国日本用，有一点点汉化的嫌疑。unparalleled sense也是超能力，更流畅一些。
Capabilities稍有一点别扭，要用的话用ability就可以，或者直接换成代词them.
take the full advantage 充分利用
do good做好事 更地道流畅些）
原
<If I could fly and have a strong body, I will rush to the place at the first time,to help those people who will die. If a fire accident happened, I will arrive there and take those people to safe place.When the reporter ask who am I,I won't tell them and leave there quietly.>
后
If I could fly and have a sound body, I would rush out in no time to help those who are dying. If a fire broke out, I would get there and bring the people to safety. When the reporter asked who I were, I would leave quietly without answering (或者是saying a word).
(strong也很好，如果想更地道些，可以用suond。A sound body健康强健的身体
at the first time第一次；比如The camera just came apart at the first time he used it. 这相机在他第一次使用时就破了。
in no time立刻，第一时间。
Die是点动词，快死去的用dying更好。
火灾，“灾”不一定要再用一个单词翻译出来，a fire就是火灾；
火灾发生不用happen，用break out,就像战争一样。
去救灾get更生动些，arrive好像你不慌不忙滴驾临了似的o(∩_∩)o。
下面句式换一下更流畅。）
原
<If I could talk to animals,I will talk with them a lot,then I will understand animals'opinions.After that,I will invoke all the people in the world DO NOT HURT ANIMAIS,THEY ARE OUR FRIENDS.It is really a great thing,isn't it?>
后
If I could talk with animals, I would have a real talk with them. Then I would be aware of the thoughts of these creatures. After that, I would tell all the people in the world that PLEASE DO NOT HURT ANIMAIS, FOR THET ARE OUR FRIENDS. It is really fantastic, isn't it?
(talk with them a lot，经常说说话，有点太低调了，要“大”聊一场have a real talk嘛~
Understand也好，如果想文绉绉一些，就用短语 Be aware of 知道，意识到。
动物的想法心理the thoughts of these creatures 用creature就是为了避免重复而已，不过那个opinion…好像要召开动物大会似的~哈哈。
invoke做恳请时多用 sb’s help o(∩_∩)o…偶就换成了最通俗的tell。
PLEASE DO NOT HURT ANIMAIS, FOR THET ARE OUR FRIENDS.注意中间用for连接，表原因。不然两个句子就不方便同时做告诉的宾语了。)
原
<If I could make nice and delicious food,I will give them to poor people.Because they really need a good big meal,if they haven't a strong body,how can they work hard?When they say thank you to me,I will smile to them and tell them it is my ty.>
后
If I could make meals fit for a king, I would give them to the poor, for they are the ones who really need a good dinner. Without a strong body, how could they possibly work well? When they said thank you to me, I would smile and tell them it is my ty.
(make nice and delicious food没问题，不过要想更生动些，可以用make meals fit for a king夸张的说法。
The poor 也就是the poor people，只不过为了减少重复词。
句式，连接用for,表原因。
Without a strong body, how could they possibly work well?就是想简短且让反问的语气更强烈些。还有 可以说haven’t got 或者don’t have 或者have no, 但是不可以说haven't a strong body。)
原
<If I have many more super powers,of course I will use them to do many more good things.Although it is a nice dream,I will do as I said if I really have these super powers.Okay,just let this dream keeping forever.>
后
If I have more unparalleled sense, I would certainly take full use of them to do much more good. It is a nice dream, though，I will realize it much the way I supposed above. Well, just please never let this dream go！
(take full use of 充分利用。
It is a nice dream, though，改了一下句型，更文一些呵呵~~。
I will realize it much the way I supposed above.偶就会像偶设想的那样实现这个梦想。much the way像…一样。
Let something go 让某物消失。)
就这些意见，看你的需要权衡吧~~瓦咔咔~~
热心网友
时间：2022-06-18 13:34
这么跟你说吧 里面的错误相当可观！！！不多改了
power是不可数名词不能加s
最后一句应该用keep
